Author Topic: Haikus (Read 23523 times)

namida · « **on:** August 11, 2004, 10:08:22 AM »

Haha. I wrote a Haiku poem about how I feel right now. And it's serious, so don't go making joke about it.

As things all get worse,
I realise it's all hopeless,
I'd be better dead.

Yet I stay here still,
I don't know why I bother,
I should just give up.

What is keeping me?
Forcing me to just live on?
Why can't I just die?

Every second comes,
Bringing me closer to death,
I CAN'T VILGEHK WAIT!

Kill me, destroy me,
You hate me, everyone does.
Please bring me the end.

You know you want to,
End my life, end it right now,
Come on, please do now.

So as I write this,
I'm just trying to waste time,
While I wait to die.

(censored it a slightly better way)

tumble_weed · « **Reply #1 on:** August 11, 2004, 04:14:00 PM »

great...

actually the second stanza isn't all that bad, the rest i think you mention death, kill die too much

Lemeri · « **Reply #2 on:** August 11, 2004, 06:41:53 PM »

Great. Now I'm in a bad mood. Why don't you just commit suicide if you really feel that way?

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #3 on:** August 11, 2004, 07:35:06 PM »

Steaver!!!! That haiku is not good! Don't you go to h*ll if you commit suicide?

And you know what? You did not censor one of the bad words!

Just like Lemeri, I'm in a bad mood too! If you commit suicide, you won't be able to talk to us in the forums, especially me!

namida · « **Reply #4 on:** August 11, 2004, 07:53:49 PM »

I wouldn't do that
I would never kill myself
I wanna die though

So anyway guys
From now on lets make this thread
Only in Haiku

(in other words - from now on, lets have a whole thread in Haiku only! ^_^)

Andi · « **Reply #5 on:** August 12, 2004, 08:34:05 AM »

Well, I censored the 1 bad word I found.

And because of the bad mood... I have no idea what's the problem. When I read this I have to laugh what results in feeling happy!

namida · « **Reply #6 on:** August 12, 2004, 10:53:22 AM »

Haha. Vilg that. I feel happier now, thanks to a certain person(strangely, their last name is the same as my first name with an extra letter on the end)

Conway · « **Reply #7 on:** August 12, 2004, 01:05:09 PM »

Steaver, may I recommend you join the forums at http://www.antiaverage.com/index(original).shtml? It's full of people like you. (No offence or anything!)

&#A0;Still, the poem's not bad. Well done! Don't go killing yourself, though! You won't go to hell for it, but it's still not a good idea.

namida · « **Reply #8 on:** August 13, 2004, 05:19:09 AM »

I wouldn't do that
I would never kill myself
I just want to die

Well that isn't true
I no longer feel that way
(If you give a vilg)

namida · « **Reply #9 on:** August 14, 2004, 02:17:16 PM »

Well... can't always be negative! Now that I'm out of the negative mood, I should post a positive Haiku! It's not to a specific person though, it's just that I though "Oh what the damn heck... Why don't I just get ideas.... For a love Haiku".

**Only Forever**

Don't just leave me here
I can't survive without you
I need you with me

Even though I try
I simply depend on you
You're more than my life

I love you so much
You just don't know what you are
What you are to me

Only forever
That is how long I'll love you
'Till the end of time

Andi · « **Reply #10 on:** August 15, 2004, 05:22:47 PM »

You should become a rapper. These might be good for raps. But I don't like Rap... X_X

Lemeri · « **Reply #11 on:** August 15, 2004, 09:54:57 PM »

I hate rap, but millions of people like it, so you could make money.

namida · « **Reply #12 on:** August 16, 2004, 04:26:43 AM »

Rapper? Kwih, booooriiiiiiiing... I've tried before. I can send you some of my songs on MSN, if you want.

Lemeri · « **Reply #13 on:** August 16, 2004, 02:32:50 PM »

No thanks.

dark_phoenix · « **Reply #14 on:** August 18, 2004, 02:11:28 AM »

The problem with these
Is that you just get started
And then suddenly

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #15 on:** August 18, 2004, 06:31:38 PM »

How do I make a proper haiku? I once made one, but G3K told me it's flawed!!!!! :-(

G3K · « **Reply #16 on:** August 18, 2004, 08:20:24 PM »

A haiku is constructed of three lines, the first of which has five syllables, the second has seven, and the third five.

dark_phoenix · « **Reply #17 on:** August 19, 2004, 04:13:43 AM »

Lemmings are stupid
They go off cliffs and in water
Then they don't exist

namida · « **Reply #18 on:** August 19, 2004, 04:21:25 AM »

That second line is eight. It should be seven.

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #19 on:** August 19, 2004, 04:02:49 PM »

Sonic the Hedgehog,
Is as fast as a cheetah,
And is very, very cool.

dark_phoenix · « **Reply #20 on:** August 19, 2004, 11:19:33 PM »

Quote from: Streetlight Admnistrator 370 link=1092218902/15#18 date=1092889285

That second line is eight. It should be seven.

oops. i must be getting dumber. when i counted it out it was right.

Liebatron · « **Reply #21 on:** August 20, 2004, 01:59:00 AM »

Mr. stapler sta down on a lemming.
"who are you you dumb idiot?"
"i'm a stapler, twit!"
"does a bear bounce?"
"uh.no"

it's in almost no way related to lemmings but atleast it's a haiku...whaddaya think?

(i found out how to do one anyway.)

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #22 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:01:09 AM »

That's not a haiku. It's flawed, I'm afraid.

Liebatron · « **Reply #23 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:02:34 AM »

whats wrong with it? did i mess up on the syllables?(translation, i messed up on the syllables.)

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #24 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:05:30 AM »

Not just that, look! That haiku has five lines, not three!

Liebatron · « **Reply #25 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:09:54 AM »

oh.........

why does everyone tell me how to do something after i do it?.......oh well.

"since when does a dead bear bounce?"
"I just saw one bounce"
"wierd haiku"

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #26 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:38:13 AM »

Flawed.

Liebatron · « **Reply #27 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:39:09 AM »

what now?

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #28 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:44:16 AM »

Don't get mad, dumb_lem. I'll help you.

The first line has five syllables.
The second line has seven syllables.
The third line has five syllables.

Try again, okay?

Liebatron · « **Reply #29 on:** August 20, 2004, 02:45:44 AM »

geez, i"ve got alotta work to do before i get this right the first time...

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #30 on:** August 20, 2004, 04:07:11 AM »

Don't worry, Dumb Lem,
You can do it! Go, go, go!
I'm counting on you!

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #31 on:** August 20, 2004, 03:02:51 PM »

I'm not a loser.
Stop being so mean, Steaver!
I really mean it.

dark_phoenix · « **Reply #32 on:** August 20, 2004, 03:11:30 PM »

poor ice eagle! :-(

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #33 on:** August 20, 2004, 03:35:45 PM »

Don't worry, buddy.
It's okay, no need to cry.
I'm okay, alright?

But not that okay.
Steaver teased me really bad!
Can't he stop it now?

dark_phoenix · « **Reply #34 on:** August 21, 2004, 03:15:20 AM »

first haiku, first line, has 6 syllables. just pointing it out.

second haiku is good

namida · « **Reply #35 on:** August 21, 2004, 06:16:37 AM »

I am not a dog.
Who called me a stupid cat?
Lemmings are insane.

(That has to be the most random Haiku ever)

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #36 on:** August 21, 2004, 01:52:57 PM »

A haiku about dark_phoenix:

Dark_phoenix is great.
She's like a very good friend.
She's so nice after all.

Andi · « **Reply #37 on:** August 21, 2004, 02:34:06 PM »

But she said "Lemmings are STUPID". It was you who said stupid is a bad word.

Lemeri · « **Reply #38 on:** August 21, 2004, 02:35:06 PM »

By the way, is dumb a bad word?

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #39 on:** August 21, 2004, 02:37:07 PM »

Well, even if she says st*pid, I still think she's a nice person. Let's just not mind these bad words. Let the mods handle it.

Lemeri · « **Reply #40 on:** August 21, 2004, 04:39:46 PM »

No problem. It was your idea to make a big deal about them in the first place.

dark_phoenix · « **Reply #41 on:** August 22, 2004, 04:08:51 PM »

Quote from: Andi link=1092218902/30#37 date=1093098846

But she said "Lemmings are STUPID". It was you who said stupid is a bad word.

if u didnt know, i meant as in "dimwitted". not i hate them.

dark_phoenix · « **Reply #42 on:** August 22, 2004, 04:10:27 PM »

Quote from: Ice_Eagle91 link=1092218902/30#36 date=1093096377

A haiku about dark_phoenix:

Dark_phoenix is great.
She's like a very good friend.
She's so nice after all.

thank you.

you seem quite nice yourself.

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #43 on:** August 22, 2004, 10:58:45 PM »

You're welcome.

Oh, and thank you, too!

Ice_Eagle91 · « **Reply #44 on:** August 22, 2004, 11:05:26 PM »

Quote from: dark_phoenix link=1092218902/30#34 date=1093058120

first haiku, first line, has 6 syllables. just pointing it out.

second haiku is good

Those are stanzas, dark phoenix.

I fixed the first line on the first stanza.

Author Topic: Haikus (Read 23523 times)

tumble_weed

Lemeri

Ice_Eagle91

Andi

Conway

Andi

Lemeri

Lemeri

dark_phoenix

Ice_Eagle91

G3K

dark_phoenix

Ice_Eagle91

dark_phoenix

Ice_Eagle91

Ice_Eagle91

Ice_Eagle91

Ice_Eagle91

Ice_Eagle91

Ice_Eagle91

dark_phoenix

Ice_Eagle91

dark_phoenix

Ice_Eagle91

Andi

Lemeri

Ice_Eagle91

Lemeri

dark_phoenix

dark_phoenix

Ice_Eagle91

Ice_Eagle91